In a crystal palace
or through the cutting wind
that bleeds my lips
I drop a tear.
Everywhere
I’m lonely,
for you are far,
so very cold,
and in the dark.
I miss you,
your warm hands,
and sweet smile,
the silly games
just running around.
Why did you leave?
I see now,
you are underground
but I’m in the dark.
11 comments:
Very potent write! Imagery and wordplay both fantastic. Thanks for the direction, enjoyed my visit :)
Makes me think of someone I know who lost her husband recently. Well done.
Very touching; great imagery :)
Sad desperate GREAT how you always give the reader the emotions feelings :) always a fan of your work ms Beez)
This is very good throughout, strong, dark very evocative.
This is an extraordinary poem; well constructed, with key lines which draw the emotions out, i.e.”that bleeds my lips” wonderful, and the last 3-lines… so emotional. Thank you, I really enjoyed this poem!
Thanks to everybody!
I truly appreciate your comments!
Blackprint Poet
So raw and heartfelt. Thanks for sharing this.
Such a beautifully expressed sentiment.
It's always the little things, tit-bits that are more memorable.
No se ingles pero lo traduci. EXCELENTE. segui asi juampi.
Powerful and well written! The depth is revealed in layers. The dark attributes highlight the mysterious intentions. That of the blind thief of hearts. Excellent, much enjoyed.
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